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Te vannán váhvár, te vanád véla, Valkkaa veltínn váén hátáht? Hoorén hóyóg, héškoe harrir, Hádát áangmár, hesté fálkáht. Berím yát bándin, tuvaaht ei ményá Malág, mánvat, yó! Máyhaltím, Yádváé palkaa yálmáraa yuhák. Biít, éstann vǒth Táhvárgan. Fíía féyaá féndat vánád, áaté ein! Te láhaá fiiú láéfašt, lyát, Šayétán šéerté, šáhtoe vyáth, Askáánáth, sáqaštá yállma, fáuté! | Come do the fires, come does the night, What good is it to mourn the passed? Alive their slayer, extinguisher of the line, Enemy of the house, who defiled their lands. We saw his cunning, the zeal he then Displayed, a fanatic's, woe! We witnessed, The howling of the beast rang in our ears. He burnt, Tahvarga judged the victims. The time of your kin's revenge will come, await it! As the hours pass, slowly, To the sky pray, the memory of your wronging, Your purpose, the fulfillment of your days, remember! |
quoting Rhetorica, Kelatetía: Dis, Major Belt 1:Five notes repeated thirteen times? Please tell me Sinemi civilization was obliterated by someone else achieving a cultural victory. I'm digging the imagery, Matrix, but the musical setting deserves to be sunk to the bottom of the ocean. ... At least twice. I also think you may have tortured syllable stress a bit too much to fit your verse; assuming the macrons indicate stress, those words simply don't fit that rhythm very well. (Of course, no one's stopping you from constructing a scansion-ignorant or scansion-avoiding culture, but... well...)
Hear | Pegerin |
The bravery of the soldiers | Torokuwag̃ naraguwag̃ |
Who fought | Toroku jirireg̃ |
For the bearer of a crown | Gapurwag̃ dusarummat |
That should no longer rule | Gapur nija ga cirgeneg̃ |
For the honor of a people | Temulwag̃ pi bedolmat |
That should no longer thrive | Temul nija ga tug̃ayneseg̃ |
For the names of gods | Seg̃irwag̃ pi ammamat |
That should no longer be worshipped | Seg̃ir nija ga lamukenseg̃ |
Forgotten entombed | Kucaga boyordag |
They lie here | Nereyaw tacaseg̃ |
Proud bones | Remomere upuray |